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Post by Silverstar on Mar 30, 2007 18:38:00 GMT -5
Silverstar yowled so all the cats in camp could hear," Let all cats old enough to catch their own prey gather here for a clan meeting"
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Post by Gingerclaw on Mar 30, 2007 18:40:11 GMT -5
Gingerkit twitches nervously as she sits if front of the high rock.
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Post by Silverstar on Mar 30, 2007 18:43:33 GMT -5
"Today a kit has reached the age of six moons and is ready to be an apprentice. Gingerkit step forward."
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Post by Gingerclaw on Mar 30, 2007 18:45:09 GMT -5
She steps forward and looks up to Silverstar expectantly.
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Post by Silverstar on Mar 30, 2007 18:47:26 GMT -5
"Gingerkit, do you promise to train hard and protect your clan?"
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Post by Gingerclaw on Mar 30, 2007 18:48:29 GMT -5
The little kit meows confidently, "I do."
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Post by Silverstar on Mar 30, 2007 18:52:55 GMT -5
"Then, from this day forward, until she recieves her warrior name, she will be known as Gingerpaw. In honor of her ginger paw."
"I, Silverstar,will take her on as an apprentice,because there are no other mentors available at this time."
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Post by Silverstar on Mar 30, 2007 18:55:09 GMT -5
everyone:" Gingerpaw!!! Gingerpaw!!!..."
"Hey Gingerpaw!!..."ect.
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Post by Gingerclaw on Mar 30, 2007 18:55:10 GMT -5
Gingerpaw walks up to her new mentor and touches noses with her.
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Post by Silverstar on Mar 30, 2007 19:29:48 GMT -5
Silverstar leaned over and whispered so noone else could hear her."You did great!!! I think you will be a great apprentice, and you know that there are other cats that would gladly take you as an apprentice. I chose you for a reason! So don't disappoint me! "
"Oh! And I expect you out and about early so we can go hunting together!!!"
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Post by Admin on Mar 30, 2007 20:59:06 GMT -5
Ummmmmmm, I can see that I have newbies here. Okay. When you talk, you have to use some way to distinct speaking from just description. "quotations" bold print etc. Also you don't have to *Whispers so only Gingerpaw can hear* I would suggest: Silverstar leaned over to Gingerpaw and whispered so no one else could hear. Something like that. Pretend you're writing a story...or better yet, a book report. And I'm your teacher who grades REALLY harshly (XD) Also, Gingerpaw was supposed to wait until I accept her bio. I'll let it slide this time considering there wasn't anything that needed to be fixed. But in the future please don't let it happen again.  |
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Post by Gingerclaw on Mar 30, 2007 22:22:21 GMT -5
sorry! at least i'll know for next time  |
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Post by Admin on Mar 30, 2007 23:36:41 GMT -5
^^ That's all I ask!
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Post by Silverstar on Apr 1, 2007 11:53:17 GMT -5
Hey gingerpaw,you can modify the post to the way feather described it by clicking "modify post" and then change it to the way you want it
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Post by Gingerclaw on Apr 12, 2007 21:51:27 GMT -5
cool!
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